A woody with a corkscrew?

Wednesday, June 22, 2005 11:10 AM
coasterqueenTRN's avatar I found THIS article on Dania Beach very amusing.

-Tina

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Wednesday, June 22, 2005 11:14 AM
I know it's a common way of writing news articles, but how many fragments do you think are in that article? ;)
I've often wondered from time to time, how to write good poetry- and make it all... Work.
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Wednesday, June 22, 2005 11:24 AM
This guy is a "journalist"? It's no wonder people on message boards can't use complete sentences when even "professionals" wouldn't know English if it punched them in the nose.

I think he needs to get out of the Florida Sun.


John
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Wednesday, June 22, 2005 11:24 AM
rollergator's avatar Hey, the guy learned how to write in incomplete sentences...leave him be! LOL! ;)

Tallest coaster in FL? Not likely! Even before SheiKra, it wasn't that tall...unless...

DBH is sinking! Alert the media! :)

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Wednesday, June 22, 2005 11:31 AM
And people wonder why a lot of people outside of FL are calling it Flor-i-DUH!

That article proves one thing. No one cares about english any more.


Watch the tram car please....
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Wednesday, June 22, 2005 11:39 AM
Wasn't there a Seinfeld episode about this? Oh nevermind, it was a twist instead...my bad. ;)
It's still me, here from the beginning back in 1999. Add 1500+ posts to the number I have in the info section if you care about such things.
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Wednesday, June 22, 2005 11:43 AM
ahh that great old American School System
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Wednesday, June 22, 2005 12:10 PM
http://rcdb.com/id622.htm

Here's the Dania Beach Hurricane.


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Wednesday, June 22, 2005 12:23 PM
If any of his English teachers are reading it, they must be embarassed. How did he get to be a journalist anyway? You think he meant helixes?
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Wednesday, June 22, 2005 12:39 PM
Mamoosh's avatar Other than the aforementioned corkscrew I see absolutely nothing wrong grammatically with how the article is written. Nothing gets printed in a newpaper without first being reviewed by an editor or two.

What the heck are all you seeing?

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Wednesday, June 22, 2005 12:45 PM
A journalist and an editor or two who should be fired and then sued for wages wasted.
John
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Wednesday, June 22, 2005 12:51 PM
There is a difference between writing with a certain style and writing with no style at all. The article was fine, even with the facts not being completely accurate.

What is lost in this discussion is how great that rollercoaster really is.

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Wednesday, June 22, 2005 1:01 PM
rollergator's avatar 'buzzer....nope, no helices to be found on the ride - it's a pure *double O-n-B*. Honestly, I'm pretty sure he meant the turnarounds...

bill, writes with "a certain style"... ;)

P.S. I never forgot how really solid DBH is. "Great", though? maybe if they'd added the tunnel and misters at the second turnaround (corkscrew?) like I'd originally asked for... LOL! ;)

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Wednesday, June 22, 2005 1:11 PM
That doesn't have anything to do with style. I can't remember when the last time I counted that many sentence fragments. I understand that typically news in print is highly paraphrased and unimportant "understood" words are generally left out. Even after all that - news print articles still have complete sentences.

Those of you who don't see the errors ... well I'll just leave it at that.

Anyway ... I never had the chance to ride it, but it looks pretty cool.

Butt lifters, eh? Hmmm.


cyberdman

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Wednesday, June 22, 2005 1:13 PM
Journalism guy here. Granted, the sentences should have been a little longer, in my opinion, as I thought they were a bit too fragmented for my tastes. However, for some people, that's a decent style to write in. Makes it easier to read at times, especially for a short piece like that.

Haha no I'm not giving Patrick the finger

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Wednesday, June 22, 2005 1:17 PM
Corkscrews? Whatever. I've long given up on caring or being
surprised about what news articles or TV shows say. I've
even heard people refer to hills as "loops."

It seems that details about roller coasters and amusement
parks in general just don't matter.

I'm quite impressed that an article about a wooden coaster
that is not new and doesn't break any records actually got
*any* press at all! How often does that happen? It's a
refreshing change from the usual even if the writing "style" left
something to be desired.

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Wednesday, June 22, 2005 1:39 PM
I have a 4 year old cousin (who was born in Russia and adopted by my cousin) who could have written that.

I'm suprised it wasn't written in chat speak. Is that going to become an accepted journalistic "style" now? Why not, everyone does it.

That guy should be blacklisted from ever publishing again for that waste of time.

Millrace, it would have been a good article about a wooden coaster if I could have gotten more than a few lines into. I read the first couple "paragraphs" and realized there was absolutely no substance to it at all. It was just a collection of sentence fragments thrown into a word document that seemed to follow a derailed train of thought.


John
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Wednesday, June 22, 2005 2:00 PM
But surely it is a refreshing change from the stupid articles
I usually see that are full of superlatives describing the latest
and "greatest" whatever and full of terms like "extreme,"
"rush," "faint of heart." "state of the art technology," and other
such overused roller coaster terms. I like that it actually
went back to the basics and described riding a coaster
as fun.

And what was originally written could have been much fuller
then what appeared. It just might have been an editor with
a lack of space and a lack of time who cut it down to the
version we are reading.

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Wednesday, June 22, 2005 2:05 PM
And a lack of English skills. Don't forget that part.
John
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Wednesday, June 22, 2005 2:21 PM
I'm not suggesting that it is the greatest piece of
literature ever created. I'm saying that it is very rare
to find a good article on roller coasters in "general public"
media and that in comparison to what else is out there, this really
isn't so bad. A little strange, yes but whatever.
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